英语作文辅导（1）
借助说明文的构思方法，看看下列标题问题该如何写：
（1）The Layout of a Hospital
Direction: You are asked to write a composition about “The Layout Of a Hospital”. Locate some important departments in the hospital based on the picture and information given below. Your compositions should be no less than 100 words.
1）the Emergency Department
2）the Out-patient Department
3）the Surgery Department
4）Dispensary/Pharmacy
5）Physician Department
6）the Eye, Ear, and Throat Department
7）the Dental Department
8）the Laboratory
9）the X-ray Department
10）the Administrative Building
11）the Ward
参考范文
Near the gate, on the west side of the road is the Emergency Department. Opposite the Emergency Department across the Main Road is the Out-patient Department. The building to the southwest of the lake is the Dispensary, which faces the Surgery Department lying on the other side of the road. Along the west wall, from south to north, stand three buildings: the Physician Department, the Eye, Ear, and Throat Department, and the Dental Department. The Laboratory is to the northwest of the round about, and beside the Laboratory, the X-ray Department is located on the same side of the road.
A winding road by the lake leads to the Ward. Near the end of the main road, the Administrative Building is situated on the east side. The hospital is nicely and conveniently laid out.
英语作文辅导（2）
2009年高考英语作文给心理辅导老师写信
给心理辅导老师写信
关键字：书信
下面是一位中学生Sunny给本校的心理咨询室写的一封信。请你仔细阅读，并就信的.内容以心理辅导老师Help的名义给这位中学生回一封信。
Dear sir。
I am an active girl, and I speak and laugh loudly in the classroom like a boy. I don’t care about small matters. On the contrary, my neighbor, the girl who sits next to me, speaks gently and dare not do the things I often do. I can understand this. What I can’t stand is that she often gets angry with me about small things. How can I get along with her?
Yours,
Sunny
注意：
1. 回信需就原信内容给出至少三条建议（如谈心、相互了解、参加同学们的生日聚会、谈论共同话题、分享快乐等）；
2. 词数：100左右。
Dear Sunny,
.........
Yours,
Help
One possible version:
Dear Sunny,
It’s very good that you want to be friends with this girl. In my opinion, you’d better first have a heart-to-heart talk with her, because understanding each other is very important for you two. And I also think it’s better for you to ask her to join you and your classmates in all kinds of activities, such as birthday parties, going out for a walk, discussing some fashionable topics, and so on. Besides, helping each other is also very important for both of you. Just share happiness and sadness with her. I believe she will understand you in time and it is certain you will be good friends in future.
Good luck to you.
Yours,
Help
英语作文辅导（3）
It is known to all that English is the international In China, English is the necessary subject for students to A lot of students complain that it is so hard to master the foreign While for me, I am the lucky guy, because I find my ways to learn it with Listening to the songs and watching movies develops my I want to see more about the world and learn about the culture, so only speaking English can bring me this What's more, I spend some time to write down some local saying when I watch I practice it until I get Let's learn English
英语作文辅导（4）
Jack is my He likes playing computer games very He often sits in the same way for too long without Now he has a headache, sore eyes and a sore He doesn’t sleep well at night, so he feels tired every
I think he should take breaks away from the He shouldn’t use the computer for a long He should do eye exercises to relax his eyes and go to bed early at
I think if he has a good rest, he will feel well
英语作文辅导（5）
Beautiful Sky The star in the sky were were crowded,and others were I found the stars were not the same were many colors,white,gray,light blue,orange,and so was really that time,the sky was like blue damask decorated by millions of bright Looking up the sky,I saw the was like a naughty it hid in the clouds and sometimes it got out of the seemsed to play"hide and seek"with stars around the moon,however,were as girls,hiding themselves in the Oh,what a beautiful sky
英语作文辅导（6）
English is the most important and useful language in the It is also one of the subjects in So I have learn English for many In class, I try to listen to the teacher carefully and speak English as much as After class, I often go over the lessons, listen to English tapes, watch English programmes on TV, read English newspapers and so I study hard, so I’m good at
By the way, here are some suggestions about how to learn English well for First, believe yourself, try to read or speak English Second, you had better learn English words by Third, it is a good idea to use English as much as Finally, why not find an English pen friend and write email messages to each other in English? Nothing is impossible if you put your heart into (世上无难事，只怕有心人) So I believe our English will be better and
英语作文辅导（7）
Look this is my English teacher .He's tall and fat .He's very fanny !
He has two small eyes ,and a big tell you, he looks like a big
So,If I meet him I often said :Hello,Mr bear .And he said :Hell ,small my classmates think I look like a bear
My English teacher works very hard .And he often tell us :You must
very hard to leron English .
I like my English
teacher very mueh!!!!
Welcome to meet my English!!!!
英语作文辅导（8）
My favourate animal is think panda is the cutist animal in the has black and white fur and especially it have black fur around eyes which looks like wear a pair of
Panda likes banboo shoots and leaves a saw panda ate apply and cakes in Zoo before,but I know in nature world they would not eat these
Now almost everyone in the world love panda,but only China has
So as a Chinese I feel proud to be born in a country has
英语作文辅导（9）
It was fine on March 12, I got up early that All the students in our school went to the hill to plant
We arrived at the hill at eight o' The teacher asked each of us to plant at least six Then we started digging, planting and We all worked so hard that we could finish our tasks ahead of Among us,Wang Lin, our monitor set a good example for Though he was ill, he worked When he finished his task, he went on to help others without even a little He was wet all over after "I must learn from him," I said to myself . Looking at the lines of the young trees, we smiled happily, forgetting our
英语作文辅导（10）
It is known to all that China is a great big old country, which has profound As a result, the diversity of culture makes this country There are fifty-six minorities and all of them have different Many foreigners come to China and they are attracted by the For example, the scenery is different in We have green and high mountains and amazing historical What’s more, Chinese food is famous around the The unity of the minorities makes our country become Every Chinese knows that we are families and will fight for the country’s We have the responsibility to keep the country
英语作文辅导（11）
I like to watch fictional movies and novels, because I am always attracted by the unpredictable plots, which opens my In the fiction movies, aliens come to the earth and try to destroy the Human being have to fight against the aliens with their I can see the big world from these It triggers my interest to explore the At the same time, I gain a lot of knowledge about the I believe that aliens must exist in another When the scientists make further research of the universe, someday, we can know more about the outer I have the great passion to explore the
英语作文辅导（12）
It's polite to say “thank you” when others help us or say something kind to
Being polite is a good tradition in our likes a person who is It's important for us to be We should say “thank you” to parents when they cook for We should say “thank you” when they wash clothes for We should also be polite at When the teachers help us work out questions ,we should say “thank you” to When we get bad grades and the teachers and classmates encourage us, we should say “thank you”. When someone open the door for us,we should say “thank you”. We should say “thank you” as often as
If everyone is polite to others,the world will be more and more
英语作文辅导（13）
如果像往常的暑假，不是玩电脑，就是看电视。而这次的暑假，妈妈特意给我报了英语补习班。
这一天，我让爸爸送我去。来到老师家，我害羞地望着老师：“老师好!”“嗯，找个位置坐吧”我点了点，找到一个位置就坐好。上课了，我拿出五年级的英语课本，老师在讲台上教我们。我认真地读着，不知不觉就下课了，我坐在位置上，感到无聊透了。这时，英语老师走到我面前，讲给我好多她的故事，我才知道，老师一以前的生活多么辛苦。
最后一节课了，这节课我们是要听写和抄单词的。老师在上面拿着点读机点着让我们写，我发现老师都流汗了。我一定不能让老师失望啊!我心里想着，所以，我就很认真地去写，后来，我居然得了满分，老师在我的英语簿的封面上贴一张小狗的图案，那只小狗还说着you are great，呵呵，真有趣!
不知不觉中，英语补习班已经结束，但我还是好想念我补习的那些日子。
英语作文辅导（14）
记得是四年级暑假的一天，我正在家里玩游戏，突然妈妈对我说：“你这样也不是办法，毕竟暑假还有四十多天呢，不能总是在家待着玩游戏，走，咱们出去玩去。”我听了立刻服从，谁知出门后妈妈东拐西拐地把我带到了“监狱”。我一到那里，英语老师便开始讲课，刚才大概是在等我。老师面带笑容，时不时地把英语翻译成中文，让我们加深理解，有时也让我们自己把英语译成中文，渐渐地，我会了一点儿，也能把部分句子翻译成中文了。可是……我还是想出去，因为在这里简直是度日如年！正如一个笑话：一位老人，感觉自己生命将尽，可是还想多活些，于是便找了家英语辅导班听课，课上老师问他：“老先生，您那么大年纪为什么还来听课？”老人回答：“因为在这里度日如年！”这个笑话正好符合我此时此刻的感觉。接下来的四十天，哦，不！是“四十年”，我每天都在辅导班里“受刑”。
唉！一想到这件事，我就烦恼，边烦恼边想：我绝不会再参加英语辅导班了！
英语作文辅导（15）
1. 自然结尾，点明主题
随着文章的结束，文章自然而然地结尾。如“helping the policeman（帮助警察）”的结尾可以是：the two children were praised by the police and they felt happy。再如“the tortoise and the hare（龟兔赛跑）” 的结尾可以是：when the hare got to the tree， the tortoise had already been there。
2. 首尾呼应，升华主题
在文章的结尾可以用含义较深的话点明主题，深化主题，起到“画龙点睛”的效果。如“i love my hometown（我爱家乡）”的结尾可以是：i love my hometown， and i am proud of it。
3. 反问结尾，引起深思
这种方式的结尾虽然形式是问句，但意义却是肯定的，而且具有一定的强调作用，可引起他人的深思。如 “learning english can give us a lot of pleasure （学英语能为我们带来许多乐趣）” 的结尾可以是：if we learn english well， we can …don’t you think learning eng-lish is great fun？
4. 表达祝愿，阐述愿望
这种方式的结尾常出现在书信或演讲稿的文体中，表示对他人的祝福或对将来的展望等。如“a letter to the farmers（给农民们的一封信）”的结尾可以是：i hope the farm-ers’ life will be better and better。
另外，书信的结尾常有以下形式的祝福语：best wishes；i wish you a merry christmas and a happy new year；i wish you have a good time等。
英语作文辅导（16）
第一种方法是用一个单词代替一组意义相同的单词，比如：
用forget(忘记)代替do not remember(没有记住)
用ignore(忽视)代替do not pay attention to(不注意)
用now(现在)代替at this point in time(此时此刻)
用because(由于)代替due to the fact that(鉴于下列事实)
第二种方法是省略同义词或近义词，比如在下面例句中，形容词important(重要的)和significant(有重要意义的)，就是两个同义词(也可以说是近义词)，我们可以省略important，只保留significant。
the government project is important and significant.(这项政府计划是重要的，有重要意义。)
the government project is significant.(这项政府计划有重要意义。)
第三种方法是在不改变句子含义的前提下，省略所有可以省略的单词，比如在下面例句中，the cover of the book(书的封面)可以省略成the book cover，is red in color(是红色的)可以省略成is red。
the cover of the book is red in color.(书的封面是红色的)
the book cover is red.(书的封面是红色的)
最后我们把这三种方法结合起来，将一个冗长、绕嘴的句子，改写成一个简短、易懂的句子。
university malls must be accessible and free from congestion in order that students, faculty and employees may have unobstructed passage through those areas of the campus.(校内道路必须是便于通行的，不拥堵的，以便让学生、教师和职员能够无阻碍地通过，到达校园的各处。)
university malls must be free enough from congestion to allow people to walk through easily.(校内道路不应当拥堵，以便人们顺利通行。)
英语作文辅导（17）
一篇好的作文除了要具备健康鲜明的主题，优美生动的文字以外，还要有一个完整、连贯、流畅的结构，我们把它归结为八个字，那就是“上下贯通，首尾相援”。
文章结构必须上下贯通，首尾相援，这也是作者思路的连贯性在文章中的体现，这种形式的连贯同时也能够体现文意的连贯，即形式服务于内容。文章的各部分之间，段落之间，前后语句间都要紧密连接，通篇一贯，这样的结构才能严谨、完美。好的结构会使文章主题鲜明突出，内容清晰完整，过渡自然流畅，文章整体和谐统一。否则，如果信马由缰，文章结构势必混乱无章，主次不分，再典型生动的材料恐怕也难以吸引读者去阅读和欣赏。“思想是有一条路的，一句一句，一段一段都是有路的，好文章的作者是决不乱走的。”（叶圣陶《认真学习语文》）。
文章结构必须细密周严，层层衔接，无懈可击，任何一篇文章都应是一个有机完整的整体，因此，我们在写作文时要在选好材料的情况下精心安排语句段落间的过渡与衔接，开头与结尾的关照与呼应，做到前后勾联，相互顾及，防止脱节，顾此失彼。
一、格外重视文章的线索。
所谓线索就是贯穿在整篇文章中情节发展与思想感情发展的路线，它像链条一样穿结着文章里全部的人物、事件和景物，让文章成为一个统一的艺术整体。在记叙文中，它把一个个彼此相关的事件及人物贯穿在一起，推进情节的发展，彰显主题；抒情性的文字中，线索又成了咏物抒怀、托物寓意的凭借，使主题突出，形散神聚。
初中课本中《藤野先生》一文以作者的爱国主义思想为明线，以作者与藤野先生的交往为暗线，把若干情节与事件有机的联系在一起，集中体现了藤野先生对学生严格要求，求实严谨，没有狭隘的民族偏见等高尚品质，这两条线索互相交融，但目标一致，都起到了贯穿全文的作用。如《感受真挚的友谊》一文，小作者以“友谊”为线索，架设小标题，向我们展现了小学生生活中三个典型画面，表现了自己与同学之间深深的友谊。而《感受友情的四季》一文更是以四季中的春、夏、秋、冬为线索，通过恰切、生动的比喻，抒写自己对友情如四季真挚感怀，以四季贯穿全文，新颖别致，使文章结构整齐划一，条理清晰，让人耳目一新。
二、严密紧凑，顺理成章。
这就是说文章的布局应该注重衔接，注重段落语句之间的过渡，前后关联，这样才不会造成各部分内容的疏散与脱离。
1.谈谈过渡。过渡是文章内容连贯的一种重要方法。好的过渡能够使文章前后衔接，自然流畅，天衣无缝。如我们学过的《从百草园到三味书屋》一文第9段“我不知道为什么家里的人要将我送进书塾里去了------ade，我的蟋蟀们！ade，我的覆盆子们和木莲们！……”很明显这是一个过渡段，巧妙地将白草园与三味书屋两段生活联结起来。又如《感受幸福》一文开头一段，“现在我终于明白了，原来它就在我的身边”一句，既回答了上文关于“幸福在哪里”的疑问，又自然地引起下文，写“我”对幸福的体验过程。
2.谈谈照应。照应是指文章前后内容之间的关照响应。前面的内容要有呼应后面的情节，前面也要埋下伏笔。在形式上照应有三种方式，一是结尾和开头的照应；二是伏笔和关键语句的照应；三是正文和标题的照应。
首尾照应是写作中常见的照应形式。开头结尾是文章的有机组成部分，好的开头能够帮助读者抓住要领，感受全文，好的结尾能够使文章的主旨更加明确，主题得到升华。而首尾照应则体现了两者的有机结合，更能突出文章的主题。如《感受友谊的枫叶》一文，小作者从不经意间发现的藏在书中的半片枫叶凝神沉思写起，道出了这代表友谊的半片枫叶的来由，结尾处以“很久很久，我才回过神来，又将那半片枫叶放回了书里”收篇，很自然地照应了开头“我将它拿起，放在手中，默默地站在那儿想了很久”，文章首尾圆合，浑然一体。再看《感受团结的力量》一文，小作者以散文化的笔法描述了几个花须经历了风雨的洗礼，造就了脉脉的芳香，但并未注意到首尾的呼应。开头写道，茉莉花虽无艳丽的外表，但香气脉脉而高雅，结尾处写“盛开的花代表了友谊的结晶，花下的世界，永远存在着那几个根须”，让人联想到花开的艳丽，与“脉脉的香气”是不吻合的，这也正是此文的重要缺憾之一。
前伏后应的照应也是照应的基本方式之一。《感受友谊的枫叶》的小作者就注意到了这一点。文章的第三段“那是一个深秋的晚上”道出了故事发生的季节是深秋的时节，而此时也是枫叶正红的时候，为后文的“从高高的树上落下了一片火红的枫叶”伏下了很好的一笔，不得不赞叹小作者在构思上的精雕细琢。
正文与开头的照应能够使主题更加明确，中心更加突出。我们看一下《感受幸福》一文的结尾：“如果有来生，我还要感受一下这辈子的幸福生活”，这一句意在照应文章的标题，然而语言过于平淡，格调低落，使人产生一种消极的情绪，不符合新时期少年儿童所应该拥有的心态，因而降低了文章的格调，这是我们在写作时要十分注意的。
一篇好的作文是讲究构造艺术的，而这个艺术的核心正是使文章“上下贯通，首尾相援”的艺术，做到这一点，也就做到了文章的通篇连贯，和谐一致，我们在作文时千万不要忽视它。