My Birthday_700字
my birthday is on july ,2004.i am very happy on my birthday.why?because i can eat my favorite foodsand get many gifts from my parents and friends on my birthday. last birthday,i often have big birthday party.so i was very tired in the morning.my father often buys me a big birthday cake. what did my mom do on my birthday? the question is easy. she cleaned all therooms and cooked delicious foods ,and i invited all my friends to my party.we played funny games before my birthday dinner begin. after the start of my birthday dinner,we sang a birthday song , light the candles and blow them.then we ate birthday cake.i opened the gifts from my parents and friends. i had a wonderful birth
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my birthday is in july. i am very happy on my birthday, because i can eat my favorite food and get many gifts from my parents and friends. last year, i had my birthday party as usual. i was very excited in the morning. my father went to buy me a big birthday cake. my mother cleaned all the rooms and cooked delicious food. i invited all my friends to my party. we played funny games, and they sang a birthday song and lighted the candles. i made a wish and blew all the candles. then we ate the birthday cake together. i opened the gifts from my parents and friends. i had a really wonderful birthday party.
修改老师:crystal老师
六年级:赵子文
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